Great story Oakley! I like the way that you used lots of adjectives to describe your monster. I also like the way you used commas, full stops and capital letters. Ka pai! I wonder if the monster had a name?
Hi Oakley ... I would love to read your writing as you sucked me right in with your amazing title, but I can't enlarge your work (I can only see 3 words per line over 3 lines). I can "arrow" up/down and "left/right", but then I lose track of what the thriller is about ... any chance of you suggesting how I might see your whole page ? PS: How is Maddox ?
What a cool story Oakley I love how he was a nice monster at the end of it. Was a bit hard to read Miss Bayliss should be able to resize it for you. Keep up the great writing.
Kia ora Oakley! A great piece of writing about one moment! I like the way you created suspense in your story by doing this as I was nervous about what was going to happen next? Looking forwards to seeing more of the wonderful work you are completing at home! Miss Reihana
Nice work Oakley, that sure was a great piece of writing. Even though I had to scroll left and right because of the way it has been uploaded, it just kept it more interesting and then the end was great, I love a happy ending. Keep up the amazing work and hopefully see you soon!
Hello again Oakley !!! Some kind person has re-sized your work for me so now I can comment properly ! The writing was as good as I imagined it to be, especially with the title "It all started with a knock at the door". Great suspense - I was almost too scared to keep reading. I think hiding under the bed sheets was a clever thing to do, until you got super brave and decided to investigate ! I loved how you used punctuation throughout, as it helped me read your mahi as well as understand it better. Funny how we think of a Monster being a scary thing, when really, if we gave them half a chance, we can get to know them better and become friends. I also love "happy endings" ... can't wait to read your next piece of writing.
Great story Oakley! I like the way that you used lots of adjectives to describe your monster. I also like the way you used commas, full stops and capital letters. Ka pai! I wonder if the monster had a name?
ReplyDeleteHi Oakley ... I would love to read your writing as you sucked me right in with your amazing title, but I can't enlarge your work (I can only see 3 words per line over 3 lines). I can "arrow" up/down and "left/right", but then I lose track of what the thriller is about ... any chance of you suggesting how I might see your whole page ?
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What a cool story Oakley I love how he was a nice monster at the end of it. Was a bit hard to read Miss Bayliss should be able to resize it for you. Keep up the great writing.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Oakley! A great piece of writing about one moment! I like the way you created suspense in your story by doing this as I was nervous about what was going to happen next? Looking forwards to seeing more of the wonderful work you are completing at home!
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Nice work Oakley, that sure was a great piece of writing. Even though I had to scroll left and right because of the way it has been uploaded, it just kept it more interesting and then the end was great, I love a happy ending. Keep up the amazing work and hopefully see you soon!
ReplyDeleteHello again Oakley !!! Some kind person has re-sized your work for me so now I can comment properly ! The writing was as good as I imagined it to be, especially with the title "It all started with a knock at the door". Great suspense - I was almost too scared to keep reading. I think hiding under the bed sheets was a clever thing to do, until you got super brave and decided to investigate ! I loved how you used punctuation throughout, as it helped me read your mahi as well as understand it better. Funny how we think of a Monster being a scary thing, when really, if we gave them half a chance, we can get to know them better and become friends. I also love "happy endings" ... can't wait to read your next piece of writing.
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